Monday, October 31, 2011

Metaficiton: A note on expectations....



I've been reading some of the meta-fiction stories, and while some are great, far too many are clearly "rushed."  Try to be creative, innovative, and write like a real writer - not someone in a hurry to get it finished.  Since you are allowed to choose other stories from other blogs to work with, you shouldn't feel tied down to something that "doesn't work."  Some of them clearly have creative directions they can take.


Length:  You should contribute some good writing towards this exercise, and two paragraphs (one at the beginning and one at the end) is not really good enough.  It's "too easy."   Your writing style in the metafiction should provide a striking and obvious contrast to the work you examine.  Use a different font or italicize to make your work stand out, and don't be afraid to interrupt.  There should be a bit of a story outside the story. 

To get an A on this assignment, you'll have to do a bit of writing, and make it look good.  You should use pictures.  You should spend some time on it.  You should have fun.
 
 Be creative!

Friday, October 28, 2011

An Update: Where we are at, and where we are going...


Hello Students,

As you know, Mr. Moon and I have finished marking the exams, and we've put our scores together for a total - 50/50.  As you know, my exam was hard, both in quantity and in content, and many of you expressed a lot of fear as to what the results would be.  The average came out to be above 80%, and many people scored very high into the 90's. Unfortunately, many scored very low as well.  Let me remind you that 80% is a very high average, and as I've said before, I don't think tests should be easy or have ridiculously high averages in the 90's.  If that's the case, the test is too easy.  So, scaling and adjusting is something I did and will continue to do.  The average for the test is above 91.5%, as Mr. Moon and I promised.  You can see the scores on my door.  The test was indeed hard, but I was generous.  Here's a rundown of what we will be doing more of, and what should be done already:

Reading Assignments

I'd like you to have at least 30 pages of The Body read for this week's classes, and I'd like you to write a bit about those 30 pages on your blogs as an assigned Reading Journal.  The Reading Journal activity for Shawshank was a bit inconsistent and many of you don't work well under a freestyle system where I allow you to write about the book when the mood hits you.  For some of you the mood produced wonderful results, but some of you waited far too long to write about the book and film after you were finished with them.  Let's try to dig deeper with The Body.  It's a great story.   Again, you can respond to what you read however you want to.  Googling things that King mentions, such as songs mentioned or historical themes from the 50's, can be interesting and add texture to reading. 


In-Class Responses

I like what I see from the short film we watched, and you guys seemed to enjoy launching into writing immediately after studying the material.  We can do more of these in the future.

The Metafiction - Due before the end of this week: )


As mentioned before, you are free to use any of the stories and free to trim and tailor them if some of the material doesn't work for the direction you want.  As well, some of the work became immature and absurd as certain writers decided not to take things seriously.  Sometimes it works, sometimes it doesn't.  You are free to get rid of or change anything that doesn't fit.  The point is - try to produce a GOOD piece of creative writing that someone might actually want to read.  Pretend you are JK Rowling or Stephen King, and try to write something that jumps off the page.

REMINDER: The blog is the most important aspect of your grade, not the exams.  I try to comment and read as much as possible, and I will eventually read and see everything when it comes to grading your blogs holistically.  So it does help you to write things that aren't assigned in class, and you are not limited to anything.  If you want to write about a movie you saw on the weekend, don't hesitate!  Three students, in particular, who have been doing a lot of this are  SuhYoung, Peter, and Dennis, among many others.  It's great to see students writing for the sake of writing, and not just grades.: )

Next week, we will review the Midterm exam, and discuss what words we will study not that we've covered all the SAT.

In terms of your next official essay, many students expressed interest in writing reviews.  We will talk about that more.  Suggestions are welcome.

See you in class.

Monday, October 24, 2011

10b2 Scores: Argumentative Essay - Ken Robinson and Creativity

Good work you guys! I'd write more but I'm busy, and you are here.  Make sure my math adds up!

10b2
Alias
Content/10 
Mechanics/10
Structure/5
 TOTAL/25 

Ottawa
9.1 9.1 4.5 22.7

Tokyo
9.3 9.2 4.6 23.1

Beijing
9.1 9.2 4.5 22.8

New York
9.2 9.3 4.6 23.1

Paris
9.4 9.4 4.7 23.5

Berlin
9.3 9.4 4.7 23.4

Santiago
9.2 9.3 4.6 23.1

Dublin
9.2 9.0 4.5 22.7

London
9.2 9.2 4.6 23.0

Rome
9.3 9.1 4.7 23.1

Madrid
9.3 9.3 4.8 23.4

Seoul
9.3 9.3 4.6 23.2

Athens
9.3 9.3 4.6 23.2

Reflective Response to "Spring" in Kim Ki Duk's Film


For this 25 minute writing exercise, you can repost the following html code to have the condensed version of the video in your blog for the sake of context: 



<object style="height: 290px; width: 540px"><param name="movie" value="http://www.youtube.com/v/41xJwJ8I0Mg?version=3&feature=player_detailpage"><param name="allowFullScreen" value="true"><param name="allowScriptAccess" value="always"><embed src="http://www.youtube.com/v/41xJwJ8I0Mg?version=3&feature=player_detailpage" type="application/x-shockwave-flash" allowfullscreen="true" allowScriptAccess="always" width="540" height="260"></object>

Thursday, October 20, 2011

10b4 Scores - Argumentative Essay: Ken Robinson on Creativity

Very sorry to be late getting these scores out.  But I'd rather give you quality feedback than just a score.  Honestly, B4 has been VERY impressive, and it's almost impossible for me to pick out the best essays.  So many are great, which is why the scores are relatively higher than usual.  You all clearly have an opinion on the issue of education, and as a result the writing was quite good.   What I will say - going the extra mile is what earned a few of you a higher score.  In some cases the writer might not be as talented or as skilled because they haven't lived abroad, but the effort speaks for itself.  Formatting nicely, including an outside source or two, and interacting with Robinson's ideas specifically are all good strategies to earn a few extra points. 

So I encourage you click around and read what other people wrote. 

I'd like to also remind you to keep writing - anything and everything is fine.  But I can tell if something is from another class.  I'd rather see genuine stuff.   On that note, try and have at least one Reading Journal written about Shawshank.  I'd honestly like to see at least two - one about the book and one about the film and book.  But for some of you who haven't yet - just write one about the film and book.  When we read The Body, I'll actually assign the responses as this freestyle approach doesn't seem to work for everyone.

After interviews, we will start the Metaficition.  Have some ideas ready.  


10b4
Alias
Content/10 
Mechanics/10
Structure/5
 TOTAL/25 

Apollo
9.3
9.2
4.7
23.2

Dionysus
9.2
9.2
4.6
23.0

Demeter
9.1
9.1
4.6
22.8

Poseidon
9.3 9.4 4.6 23.3

Hermes
9.3
9.3
4.7
23.3

Chronos
9.3
9.2
4.6
23.1

Gaia
9.2
9.2
4.5
22.9

Ares
9.4
9.3
4.7
23.4

Zeus
9.3
9.3
4.6
23.2

Ajax
9.3
9.3
4.6
23.2

Orion
9.3
9.3
4.7
23.3

Eos
9.2
9.2
4.6
23.0

Prometheus
9.1
9.2
4.6
22.9


Thursday, October 13, 2011

10b5 Scores - Argumentative Essay: Ken Robinson on Creativity

I apologize for the amount of time it's taking to get things graded, but Seniors are dominating my time with college essays and letters, and November 1st is their deadline. 

10b5 is coming along nicely, and I like what I see on the blogs.  Try to post reading journals AS you read - and not three weeks later. Remember, these are up to you to complete at your own pace, and you should write at least two for Shawshank - one about the book and one about the film and book compared.   If you haven't written one about the book it is probably too late, so try to make a better one to compensate about the film and book.

As for "extra writing."  Reposting stuff from other classes is fine, but what I find really impressive is real extra writing that is obviously not something from last year or last week in Mr. Moon's class.  What I like to see are creative things, like what Jingyeong has done with her amazing photography, or even a poem like Sehee's.  Extra writing is writing for the sake of writing and should be fun, and 10b5 isn't writing as much as some of the other classes. 

Here are the scores.  Going up!  Keep in mind that Structure is an easy place to earn extra points simply by making your post look good.
 
10b5
Alias
Content/10 
Mechanics/10
Structure/5
 TOTAL/25 

Raven
9.0
9.1
4.4
22.5

Woodpecker
9.1
9.0
4.6
22.7

Crane
9.0
9.1
4.4
22.5

Pelican
9.3
9.3
4.7
23.3

Swan
9.1
9.0
4.7
22.8

Duck
9.1
9.1
4.6
22.8

Toucan
9.2
9.0
4.6
22.8

Falcon
9.4
9.0
4.8
23.2

Parrot
9.3
9.2
4.7
23.2

Budgie
9.1
9.0
4.6
22.7

Finch
9.2
8.9
4.7
22.8

Robin
9.0
8.9
4.6
22.5

Eagle
8.8
9.0
4.4
22.2

Hawk
9.3
9.3
4.7
23.3

For each assignment I'd like to highlight one student's paper as an example of quality work.  Because I feature it does not mean it's the absolute best essay of the bunch or the highest scoring, but there might be something that student did that I feel is worth looking at.

For this assignment I'd like to look at Jiseon's paper.   What makes this a strong essay is the amount of extra research she did to illustrate a well stated thesis which she discussed through posed questions.  Though she's not the best writer in terms of grammar, she is very good at getting to a point clearly and economically.  This essay is actually one of the shortest in the class at just over 600 words, but in this case "short and sweet" works and her arguments develop with outside sources.  Lot's of stats and pictures which enforce her views persuasively.  Though the font is a bit small, the post simply looks "good."  Organized, centered, and designed to deliver her message effectively.  And while I never said this was necessary, she even cited her sources!  The extra mile, in this case, has earned extra points.  So try to keep this in mind - essays on paper are soon to be a thing of the past.  Use the blog to maximize the impact of your writing by enriching it with pictures and links which help add oomph.

Good work everyone.