10b1 | Alias | Content/10 | Mechanics/10 | Structure/5 | TOTAL/25 |
Monkey | 9.3 | 9.2 | 4.7 | 23.2 | |
Tiger | 9.3 | 9.4 | 4.6 | 23.3 | |
Iguana | 9.3 | 9.0 | 4.6 | 22.9 | |
Shark | 9.3 | 9.2 | 4.6 | 23.1 | |
Gorilla | 8.8 | 8.8 | 4.4 | 22.0 | |
Koala | 9.0 | 9.1 | 4.5 | 22.6 | |
Sea Turtle | 9.3 | 9.1 | 4.6 | 23.0 | |
Giraffe | 9.1 | 9.2 | 4.6 | 22.9 | |
Zebra | 9.0 | 9.0 | 4.5 | 22.5 | |
Lion | 9.0 | 9.0 | 4.5 | 22.5 | |
Kangaroo | 9.2 | 9.2 | 4.6 | 23.0 | |
Elephant | 9.1 | 9.1 | 4.7 | 22.9 | |
Polar Bear | 9.1 | 9.1 | 4.5 | 22.7 |
For some assignments, I'll often select snippets of your writing to feature if they are particularly well written or poignant. I haven't cleaned these up grammatically, so do evaluate these samples and point out errors in a "peer editing" fashion. I encourage you to read and learn. I'm sorry, but I think I've missed some people and I forgot to write down names for others. We can sort that out in class.^^
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This is why I do not like SAT or TOEFL writing for I come out sounding too dry and mechanical when writing those kinds of standardized essays. Of course, there is an occasional epiphany, and sentences to my liking flow out like liquid, but that is a rare case.-Somebody
Nature has the strength to topple that great tree that is rotting by that bench and has the delicacy to imprint this complex but beautiful pattern on a flower almost too tiny to see. - Eunji
Whenever I met him, he always talks about my ‘baby-era’; how he contributed to my hygiene status- he said he cleaned up my dung. After talking about that, he always asks me about my love life which I have nothing much to say. In brief, he is just like a boy. – Soho
Yes, efficiency is over quantity. Sleep is like a dish of Italian balsam-sauced chicken salad you can easily have in a buffet or a Pizza Hut salad bar. The first dish tastes fresh and crisp, and you ingest it with gusto. The second dish is still good, and you feel “reasonably” full. The nutritious dish indulges to the senses when you ingest it just enough. The third dish, however, is over your stomach’s capability, and makes it slightly uncomfortable. But it is still not that bad. The fourth dish is the climax of displeasure; your stomach swells, as if it will pop when you poke it with a needle. And most of all, it does not taste crisp and fresh any more; it is just as faceless and disgusting as a peanut butter sandwich you have every morning. Efficiency is over quantity.-Somebody
However, writing well seemed different from proving well. The kernels of essays, too, were "thoughts," but essays were thoughts plus "something else." Metaphorically speaking, a "good" chocolate is more of a 50% cacao powder plus milk plus sugar plus fat plus almonds than just 100% cacao. Determining the write proportion of cacao and other elements seemed like the bolt and key in producing a "good" writing. – Soyeon
At first muscles all over my body would scream as I wave the blade in the air again and again. The great pain soon overcomes me. However after the first few minutes of torture endorphin kicks in and the pain is gradually gone. From this point the morning exercise that I so dreaded actually becomes fun! With the high feeling due to my trusted hormone I enjoy the rest of the morning exercise with a smile. Now my essay writing for me is very similar to this. -Sungwoo
As for tone, I try to find a balance between seriousness and humor, although that does not always have the effect I intend. Depending on the type of writing, the intensity or mood of the tone should adapt, and I am still working to improve my writing in that field. A common trait in most pieces I write is that I enjoy sneaking little bits of humor or into the writing. This humor sometimes takes the form of light sarcasm or satire, and I include those bits to occasionally relieve tension and overall try to make the writing more enjoyable. - Hongsoon
My strength is that my writing is as clear as science or math. It is not hard to find out what I’m talking about. However, this style of writing sometimes lacks deepness. It is easy to read and understand, but that’s all. No more meanings or emotions are contained in it. It could be compared to a body. My essay just has bones.-Gun
Everyone has their own strength and weaknesses in writing, but until I took Mr. Johnson’s class, I only knew what my weak points were and sometimes I even thought I didn’t have any strength. Mr. Johnson told me that my contents and organization was great and I was stunned by what he said. However, after hearing his comments, I gained some confidence and liked writing even more.-Yoonjee
It is taken for granted that the sole purpose of school is to make a person who will be able to successfully adapt and "melt into" the society. And, obviously, "dating" and "having relationship with a person who has a different gender" has a high possibility of being an important aspect inside one's life in society. If KMLA ends up strictly regulating the relationship amongst students of distinct sex, the students, after graduation, will not be able to sufficiently adjust to this part of society quickly.-Samuel
Although I haven’t met many people who dislike or seriously criticized my writing style, I usually cannot satisfy or feel comfortable toward my essays. I believe it’s because of use of language. I’m not word-smart and unfamiliar with using high-ranking figurative languages. As a result, I found myself putting the same vocabularies and phrases over and over again.-Hyunseok
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Some very good writing and honest expression above. In order to become better writers, I encourage you to think about writing as a process instead of a task. Learn from other writers (each other), and strive to improve.
See me privately to learn what Exotic Zoo Animal you are. If you don't like your animal, I'm sorry. It was a random selection, and the animal I chose for you is not meant to symbolize you in any way. : ) I hope you’ll receive animism and instinct as writers in the wilderness of wisdom throughout the year. You don't belong in a zoo.
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